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    please check my mistakes

    Human nature is always interested in various researches all his life. In general they can perform their gained skills when they grow up. In fact in early ages people can develop interesting solutions in their fantasy world. On the other hand children and adults neither have experience that can make dreams true nor have condition or opportunity. However, several challenging and ambitious spirit of researchers can perform their ideals in advance.
    In this sense, the fantasy world of secondary school is very important because especially in this age they learn how to produce solutions to the problem at every stage of life.
    Thatís why itĒs important to realize the potential of these active brains in the appropriate research environment and take their excitement into control by the experienced teachers.
    So that every young person can analize and solve problems on his own.The thing that Edison was most afraid of was darkness. By inventing a lamp he gained a great convenience for himself as well as for mankind.
    Scientific activities are done with these feelings, thoughts, with enthusiasm and excitement at ... School
    Model rockets, model planes, tenis projects, are carried out by our students in many areas of scientific activity.
    Moreover, our students prepeare physics, chemistry, biology and mathematics to participate in the national and international Olimpic competitions .During the week and at the weekends work with Olympic counselor.

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    Re: please check my mistakes

    No teacher response.

    Human nature is always interested in various researches all his life. (how can "human nature" be "interested" in smth? what is "all his life"? For the "nature", the pronoun should be its. Very confusing sentence, what does it mean?)
    In general, they (who?) can perform their gained skills (skills are not performed) when they grow up. In fact, in early ages (?) people can develop interesting solutions in their fantasy world. On the other hand, children and adults neither have experience that can make (whose?) dreams (+come) true nor have condition(s) or opportunity (I guess adults do have some experience). However, several challenging and ambitious spirit (several and spirit do not match in the number) of researchers can perform (wrong verb) their ideals in advance.
    In this sense, the fantasy world of secondary school (what is it?) is very important because, especially in this age, they learn how to produce (find?) solutions to the (delete it) problems at every stage of life.
    That's why it's important to realize the potential of these active brains in the appropriate research environment and take their excitement into control by the experienced teachers (very confusing). (It seems to be an official paper, so contractions like that's and it's are not recommened).
    So that every young person can analize and solve problems on his own.The thing that Edison was most afraid of, was darkness. By inventing a lamp he gained a great convenience for himself as well as for mankind.
    Scientific activities are done with these feelings (which ones exactly?), thoughts, with enthusiasm and excitement at ... School
    Model rockets, model planes, tenis (tennis?) projects, are carried out by our students in many areas of scientific activity (hard to understand at all).
    Moreover, our students prepeare physics, chemistry, biology and mathematics to participate in the national and international Olimpic competitions .(I understand what you mean by Olympic competitions but I guess another term should be used for English speaking people. How can you prepare physics or chemistry to participate in a competition? Those sciences seem to be ever prepared ) During the week and at the weekends work with Olympic counselor. (Who works? Where is the subject?)

    I still do not understand if this is a coherent text or just several sentences.

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    Re: please check my mistakes

    Thanks a lot I tried to correct them. I don't know maybe there are still some mistakes left.

    Human nature is always interested in various researches all his life. In general, people can perform their gained skills when they grow up. In fact, in early ages people can develop interesting solutions in their fantasy world. On the other hand, children neither have experience that can make their dreams come true nor have conditions or opportunity. However, several challenging and ambitious spirit of researchers can perform their ideals in advance.
    In this sense, the fantasy world of secondary school student is very important because, especially in this age, they learn how to find solutions to problems at every stage of life.
    Thatís why itís important to realize the potential of these active brains in the appropriate research environment in order to take their excitement into control by the experienced teachers.
    So that every young person can analize and solve problems on his own.The thing that Edison was most afraid of, was darkness. By inventing a lamp he gained a great convenience for himself as well as for mankind.
    Considering all these scientific activities are done with enthusiasm and excitement at ... School
    Model rockets, model planes, tennis projects, are carried out by our students in many areas of scientific activity.
    Moreover, our students prepeare physics, chemistry, biology and mathematics to participate in the national and international Olimpic competitions .During the week and at the weekends they work with Olympic counselor.

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    Re: please check my mistakes

    Human nature is always interested in various researches all his life
    I am puzzled why you use 'his' for 'human nature'?
    I know human beings have interests. How could 'human nature' (character of a person) also have interest?
    What researches are you talking about?
    Do you mean everyone has interest in research?

    It is very difficult to understand what you have written. You have to learn to write more clearly.

    not a teacher
    Last edited by tedtmc; 09-Apr-2010 at 10:51.

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    Re: please check my mistakes

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    I am puzzled why you use 'his' for 'human nature'?
    I know human beings have interests. How could 'human nature' (character of a person) also have interest?
    What researches are you talking about?
    Do you mean everyone has interest in research?

    It is very difficult to understand what you have written. You have to learn to write more clearly.

    not a teacher
    actually I'm translating some articles and it's the first time in my life.That's why I need your help.

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    I understand you translate it from Russian, right? There are lots of Russian concepts and expressions and what you got in your translation seems to be Ruglish. Do you have a Russian version? May be I could help you with translation.

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