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    #1

    A short poem

    this is a v.short poem

    i hope you like it

    :i feel sick sence you left me and went apart
    every thing i have i gave you even my heart


    faithfull
    Last edited by mickel; 17-Apr-2010 at 20:15.

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    #2

    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by mickel View Post
    this is a v.short poem

    i hope you like it

    :i feel sick sence you left me and went apart
    every thing i have i gave you even my heart


    faithfull
    Hello mickel,
    Would you please give me more explanation about "V short poem"?

    Thanks in advance

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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Hello mickel,
    Would you please give me more explanation about "V short poem"?

    Thanks in advance
    I think v. is supposed to mean 'very'.

    The poem means:
    I feel sick since you left me and went away.
    Everything I had, I gave to you, even my heart.


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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    I think v. is supposed to mean 'very'.

    The poem means:
    I feel sick since you left me and went away.
    Everything I had, I gave to you, even my heart.
    right v its mean very

    but why had

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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by mickel View Post
    right v its mean very

    but why had
    You use 'had' because if you've given everything you own to her, then you no longer 'have' it. You had it, now she has it.

    (You need to be careful of giving everything you have to women! - or men, as the case may be.)

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    Re: A short poem

    Sorry for my curiousity, but I wonder why a native made such a mistake, plus he specialized in academic area. Are you really a native English, Mickel?
    Any way, I enjoyed reading your very short poem.


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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Sorry for my curiousity, but I wonder why a native made such a mistake, plus he specialized in academic area. Are you really a native English, Mickel?
    Any way, I enjoyed reading your very short poem.

    yeah im from uk i swore but i live in middle east


    why you asked


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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    You use 'had' because if you've given everything you own to her, then you no longer 'have' it. You had it, now she has it.

    (You need to be careful of giving everything you have to women! - or men, as the case may be.)
    thank u
    im a grateful to you


    but i did not understand "you need...." are you mean"dont give any one every thing or what?

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    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by mickel View Post
    thank u
    im a grateful to you


    but i did not understand "you need...." are you mean"dont give any one every thing or what?
    Hello Mickel,
    Because you made drastically some mistakes suc as; A grateful, using "have" in past tense, "sence" in place of "since"... your native language might have been changed in middle east!!!

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    #10

    Re: A short poem

    Quote Originally Posted by mickel View Post
    thank u
    im a grateful to you


    but i did not understand "you need...." are you mean"dont give any one every thing or what?
    Yes.

    You need to try to use some punctuation.

    Also, Taghavi is questioning whether your native language is English, as you claim in your profile, because your English is poor.

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