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    Question Would you please correct my grammar? Thank you.

    What would I change about my self

    When I look at my life, it becomes quite clear to me that I would like to start a small business to change my life.

    I feel I will be successful in business, because it is a profession that I will enjoy and feel comfortable working with. I am not passionate about working for other people. I have done it for more than 7 years and after my last job separation in January of last year I have just decided it is time to quit putting off my happiness and goal of working for myself. I am in the midst of making that dream come true.

    All of my reasons considered, to have my own business could give me several new opportunities for my self- improvement, and a chance to be financially independent, what is more it is the best way that my dream will come true. It is not only a challenge but a really hard and a clear self-knowledge. The idea that I prefer to go into my business for myself than to work for a company does fit in with my aims because: I am, I am that.

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    Re: Would you please correct my grammar? Thank you.

    What would I change about my self

    When I look at my life, it becomes quite clear to me that I would like (1)to start a small business to change my life.

    I feel I will be successful in business,(no comma) because it is a profession that I will enjoy and feel comfortable working with. I am not passionate about working for other people. I have done it for more than 7 (seven) years and after my last job separation (I left my last job)in January of last year I have just decided it is (was) time to quit putting off my happiness and goal (plans) of working for myself. I am in the midst of making that dream come true.

    All of my reasons consideredI have pondered over it and I think to have (having) my own business could give me several new opportunities for my self- improvement, and a chance to be financially independent,(.) What is more, it is the best way that my dream will (for my dream to)come true. It is not only a challenge but a really hard and a clear self-knowledge (??). The idea that I prefer to go into my business for myself than to work for a company does fit in with my aims because: I am, I am that (that is what I am)
    (1)
    Look at my life - I don't know how one can do this.
    it becomes quite clear to me that I would like...
    Something becomes clear. I think you cannot say that 'I would like...' becomes clear.


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    Last edited by tedtmc; 18-Apr-2010 at 03:39.

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