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happys82

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In our school, there is a conference hall , where poetry, debates, special events and meetings,seminars,cinevision representations are performed and as well as, panels, parent’s education are organized. Our 350-person conference room is also used for theatrical performances and for various activities. It is one of the best conference hall of ... side, which equipped with last audio and video system , with heating and air properties that creates comfortable, spacious environment to guests.
[FONT=&quot]For more productive lessons there are multimedia rooms, which are surrounded by data projectors, computers and sound systems.[/FONT]Our students study in both Turkish and foreign language DVDs and CDs, and reinforce what they have learned here. As these rooms have interactive lessons, as well as visual and audio are processed.
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In our school, there is a conference hall, where poetry, debates, special events[STRIKE] and[/STRIKE], meetings, seminars,
and cinevision (video?) [STRIKE]representations[/STRIKE] broadcasts are [STRIKE]performed[/STRIKE]held, and [STRIKE]as well as,[/STRIKE] panels and parent’s education events are organized.

Our 350-person conference room is also used for theatrical performances and for various
other activities. It is one of the best conference halls[STRIKE] of[/STRIKE] in ... side (?I'm not sure what this is - is it the name of a town?), [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE] and is equipped with[STRIKE] last[/STRIKE] the latest audio and video [STRIKE]system[/STRIKE]equipment. [STRIKE]with [/STRIKE]It has heating and [STRIKE]air properties[/STRIKE]ventilation systems [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] which create[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] a comfortable, spacious environment [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] for guests. (Note: it is not the heating or the ventilation that make the room spacious!)

For more productive lessons there are multimedia rooms, which are [STRIKE]surrounded by[/STRIKE] equipped with data projectors, computers and sound systems.Our students [STRIKE]study in[/STRIKE] use both Turkish and foreign language DVDs and CDs, and reinforce what they have learned here. [STRIKE]As [/STRIKE]These rooms [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE]can be used for interactive lessons, as well as visual and audio [STRIKE]are processed[/STRIKE] processing.

My suggestions are above.
 
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