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    I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Hi,

    Question:
    Does my sentence exactly convey the idea I want to say?

    Sentence:
    I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.

    I want to say:
    When I studied at the ABC University, I needed to do some IT assignments.
    There were both small and large assignments
    And the results of those assignments were very good.

    Thanks

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Quote Originally Posted by uktous View Post
    Hi,

    Question:
    Does my sentence exactly convey the idea I want to say?

    Sentence:
    I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.

    I want to say:
    When I studied at the ABC University, I needed to do some IT assignments.
    There were both small and large assignments
    And the results of those assignments were very good.

    Thanks
    You don't need the comma after "assignments". 2 of your ideas are conveyed perfectly, but the original sentence doesn't show that the assignments you did were a variety of sizes.

    Also, depending on which university you're talking about, you may not need "the" before the name. For example:

    I obtained good......etc...... when I studied at Oxford University.

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I studied at the ABC University.
    It's OK. Does this sound better?

    When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments.[/QUOTE]

    not a teacher

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    It's OK. Does this sound better?

    When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments.
    not a teacher[/QUOTE]

    someone told me:

    "When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments."
    This will emphasis the university.

    "I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I was studying at ABC University."
    This will emphasis the results.

    Agree?

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    No, I don't agree. It almost leaves an implication you got poor results elsewhere.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Quote Originally Posted by uktous View Post
    not a teacher
    someone told me:

    "When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for my IT assignments."
    This will emphasis(emphasises) the university.

    "I obtained good results for my IT assignments, when I was studying at ABC University."
    This will emphasis the results.

    Agree?[/QUOTE]

    Not really.
    I thought (1) is easier to follow - you tell people about the university you study at, then how you well you did there.

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Hi,

    How about this?

    When I was studying at ABC University, I obtained good results for assignments, especially my IT assignments.

    2 benefits:

    (1) easier to follow, as tedtmc says.
    (2) no implication about poor results elsewhere, as Barb_D says.

    Agree?

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.
    I agree. The actual exam results speak for themsellves.

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    Re: I obtained good results....., when I studied at .....

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    Where are you going to use the sentence? You use 'good results', but this is a subjective view and in some contexts, it might be better to give the results or an indication of what you mean.
    I use the sentence in my job cover letter.
    There were more than 1 assignments, so it is too long to mention all of the results.
    However, saying "all over 70 marks" may be better.

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