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    azz is offline Member
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    a. When he came back to the farm, he found that he was cut of from his kindred, a creature of another order, who felt that he was superior to them.

    Is this sentence acceptable?

    Is it the same as:

    b. When he came back to the farm, he found that he was cut of from his kindred, he found that he was a creature of another order, who felt that he was superior to them.
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    Re: sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by azz View Post
    a. When he came back to the farm, he found that he was cut off from his kindred and was a creature of another order who felt (that) he was superior to them.



    Is it the same as: same meaning

    b. When he came back to the farm, he found that he was cut off from his kindred. He found that he was a creature of another order who felt (that) he was superior to them.

    Your sentence b. had two independent clauses separated by only a comma; that is not correct punctuation. You either have to use a semicolon, if you want to keep it as one sentence, or have two separate sentences.

    I prefer separate sentences because "he found that" appearing twice in one sentence doesn't sound good. It doesn't sound much better in two sentences.

    I would use the revised sentence a.
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