Results 1 to 2 of 2
  1. Unregistered
    Guest
    #1

    Any room for improvement in better English version?

    As a news editor and reporter, she specializes in reports on the World Expo. Her stories recorded the growth of the Expo Park, from contract signings and ground breaking ceremonies, to the completion of venues.

    ----------------------------------------------

    If I suggest that 'Her stories recorded' be replaced by 'She witnessed' to make it sound better, would it be good advice? Thank you.

  2. emsr2d2's Avatar
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 41,838
    #2

    Re: Any room for improvement in better English version?

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    As a news editor and reporter, she specializes in reports on the World Expo. Her stories recorded the growth of the Expo Park, from contract signings and ground breaking ceremonies, to the completion of venues.

    ----------------------------------------------

    If I suggest that 'Her stories recorded' be replaced by 'She witnessed' to make it sound better, would it be good advice? Thank you.
    You can use "she witnessed" but that doesn't explain that she then reported on them. It only shows that she was present in person at the events.

Similar Threads

  1. [Grammar] don't sign nothing
    By Unregistered in forum Frequently Asked Questions
    Replies: 84
    Last Post: 04-Jun-2010, 01:25
  2. Australian English
    By seba_870701 in forum General Language Discussions
    Replies: 13
    Last Post: 26-Oct-2009, 16:20
  3. English version of workingdoc.com
    By nizarue in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 13-Dec-2008, 00:16
  4. How does an English club in your area work?
    By sympathy in forum Teaching English
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: 21-Nov-2008, 15:19
  5. What is an english corner?
    By Guest in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: 04-Oct-2008, 00:20

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •