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    Sentence Rewrite

    How could this sentence be rewritten?

    As a follow-up to this call, a packet will be mailed to you and it will include an acknowledgment letter, attending physician statement, release of medical information, and a reimbursement agreement form.

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    Re: Sentence Rewrite

    Quote Originally Posted by Unregistered View Post
    How could this sentence be rewritten?

    As a follow-up to this call, a packet will be mailed to you and it will include an acknowledgment letter, attending physician statement, release of medical information, and a reimbursement agreement form.
    Which parts of it do you want to rewrite? It's impossible to rewrite the whole thing as most of it is very important to the subject matter. What's wrong with the original?

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    Re: Sentence Rewrite

    .... a packet will be mailed to you and it will include...

    ...we will send you a packet which will include.. (from passive to active voice)

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