could anyone correct my report please :)?

[Martz]

Thank you in advance

REPORT ON THE BEST PLACE TO CAMP IN MY AREA


INTRODUCTION

The aim of this report is to point out what is the best place to go camping in my area and when it is the finest time of the year for coming.

WHERE TO GO

There are many campsites in Ca'Savio (my town), because the tourism industry is largely practiced here, but the best value for money is surely offered by "Camping Union Lido".
It is a huge site, with a wide range of different kinds of accomodation: from hotels to bungalows and from caravans to pitches. As a result, you can choose the one which suits you best, also depending on how much you want to spend.
The camping is open from March to October, but the warmest and most recommended months are July and August.

FACILITIES

As they consider sports very important, the camp has many large swimming pools, golf and minigolf courses and football, basketball and tennis courts.
Moreover, you can find a coin laundry and plenty of shops, bazars, bars, pizzerias and restaurants.

WHAT TO BRING WITH

If you are planning to come in the summer, as suggested, you should bring with you light clothes and a jacket in case it gets colder on the evenings.
It would be also better for you to bring a hair drier and some towels. You can buy them at the camping's main bazar otherwise.

 

[billmcd]

Nice work; a few suggestions:

INTRODUCTION

The aim of this report is to point out [STRIKE]what is [/STRIKE]the best place to go camping in my area and [STRIKE]when it is the finest [/STRIKE] the best time of the year [STRIKE]for coming[/STRIKE]to go.

WHERE TO GO

There are many campsites in Ca'Savio (my town), because the tourism [STRIKE]industry is largely practiced [/STRIKE]is popular here, but the best value for the money is surely offered by "Camping Union Lido".
It is a huge site, with a wide range of [STRIKE]different kinds [/STRIKE][STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] accomodations: from hotels to bungalows and from caravans to pitches. As a result, you can choose the one [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE]that suits you best, [STRIKE]also[/STRIKE] depending on how much you want to spend.
[STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] Camping is open from March to October, but the warmest and most recommended months are July and August.

FACILITIES

[STRIKE]As they consider [/STRIKE]If sports are very important to visitors, the camp has many large swimming pools, golf and minigolf courses and football, basketball and tennis courts.
Moreover, you can find a coin laundry and plenty of shops, bazars, bars, pizzerias and restaurants.

WHAT TO BRING WITH YOU

If you are planning to come in the summer, [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] it is suggested, you should bring with you light clothes and a jacket in case it gets colder [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in the evenings.
It would be [STRIKE]also better [/STRIKE]better also for you to bring a hair drier and some towels. You can buy them at the [STRIKE]camping's[/STRIKE]camp's main bazar otherwise.

 

[Martz]

thank you so much

 

[billmcd]

Sorry, on reviewing my suggestions I missed one correction. Under the paragraph "Where To Go", "the tourism" should be "tourism" without "the".

 

[nogy]

help needed !!! can anyone correct this report plz..

Nice work; a few suggestions:

INTRODUCTION

The aim of this report is to point out [STRIKE]what is [/STRIKE]the best place to go camping in my area and [STRIKE]when it is the finest [/STRIKE] the best time of the year [STRIKE]for coming[/STRIKE]to go.

WHERE TO GO

There are many campsites in Ca'Savio (my town), because the tourism [STRIKE]industry is largely practiced [/STRIKE]is popular here, but the best value for the money is surely offered by "Camping Union Lido".
It is a huge site, with a wide range of [STRIKE]different kinds [/STRIKE][STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] accomodations: from hotels to bungalows and from caravans to pitches. As a result, you can choose the one [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE]that suits you best, [STRIKE]also[/STRIKE] depending on how much you want to spend.
[STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] Camping is open from March to October, but the warmest and most recommended months are July and August.

FACILITIES

[STRIKE]As they consider [/STRIKE]If sports are very important to visitors, the camp has many large swimming pools, golf and minigolf courses and football, basketball and tennis courts.
Moreover, you can find a coin laundry and plenty of shops, bazars, bars, pizzerias and restaurants.

WHAT TO BRING WITH YOU

If you are planning to come in the summer, [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] it is suggested, you should bring with you light clothes and a jacket in case it gets colder [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in the evenings.
It would be [STRIKE]also better [/STRIKE]better also for you to bring a hair drier and some towels. You can buy them at the [STRIKE]camping's[/STRIKE]camp's main bazar otherwise.

i will be grateful if anyone replied as soon as possible..
ACADEMIC IELTS TEST

writing task 1
the question says the charts below show the results of a survey of adult education.The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study.the pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.write 150 words.

my answer:

In this report I am going to describe 2 charts.

The first is a barchart that shows the number of adults(in percentages) and reasons why they decide to study. The least percentage (9%) goes to meeting people, closely followed by 12% for the ability to change jobs. Also, 2 equal percentages were given to enjoying learning/studying and improving prospects of promotion which were both 20%.Where as, 22% of adults said they want to study because,it will be helpful for their current jobs. 38% was given for gaining qualifications and the last one gets the most percentage with(40%) for interest in subject.

The second is a pie chart that gives an overview on how the costs of each course should be shared amongst people.Firstly, it shows that 40% of the costs must be paid by an individual. This is by far the maximum percentage in this chart.Secondly, te employer should pay 35%. Finally, the tax payers ought to pay the least amount with 25% of the costs.

This ends my report. (172 words)






how much band width will i get in this report???