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    is this good English

    Dear experts, could you please tell if the following sounds OK in English:

    "Tuberculosis is a disease that people with reduced immunity are prone to. However, there are vulnerable groups, including people who indulge in alcohol and drugs, smoke, live in bad housing conditions and are under permanent stress. In terms of worldwide rate of spreading, tuberculosis is now a disease that outruns even AIDS epidemics."

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    Re: is this good English

    Quote Originally Posted by snade17 View Post

    Tuberculosis is a disease that people with reduced immunity are prone/susceptible to. Besides, there are vulnerable groups (no comma) including people who indulge in alcohol and drugs, smoke; who live in bad housing conditions, and are under permanent stress. In terms of worldwide spread, tuberculosis is now a disease that outnumbers even AIDS."
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    Re: is this good English

    and are under permanent stress- I would use or rather than and.

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    Re: is this good English

    Thanks a lot. You were most helpful!

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