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    yellow river is offline Newbie
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    please check this paragraph

    I am trying to write an email

    It is wonderful to be connected with many of you. I remember those wonderful days working in the cleaning department at the hotel. It was an amazing experience for me. When I was hungry I would visit the kitchen and I would always receive "something" from my wonderful colleagues working in the kitchen. The fond memories will always remain in my life.

    thank you.

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    billmcd is offline Key Member
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    Re: please check this paragraph

    Using "connected" do you mean by email? If not, maybe "to have known you" would be better. Otherwise, it is an excellent email.

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    Re: please check this paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by yellow river View Post
    When I was hungry I would visit the kitchen and I would always receive "something" from my wonderful colleagues working in the kitchen.
    I suggest removing the quote marks from something.


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