please check this paragraph

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yellow river

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I am trying to write an email

It is wonderful to be connected with many of you. I remember those wonderful days working in the cleaning department at the hotel. It was an amazing experience for me. When I was hungry I would visit the kitchen and I would always receive "something" from my wonderful colleagues working in the kitchen. The fond memories will always remain in my life.

thank you.
 

billmcd

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Using "connected" do you mean by email? If not, maybe "to have known you" would be better. Otherwise, it is an excellent email.
 

RonBee

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When I was hungry I would visit the kitchen and I would always receive "something" from my wonderful colleagues working in the kitchen.
I suggest removing the quote marks from something.

:)
 
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