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    please, check if there is a mistake

    We learn the basic rules of scouting in the first three months within the activities as mountain bike tour, fishing and hillwalking. At the end of the third months we swear and start scouting activities. We arrange mountain and forest tours and have opportunity to learn through having fun.

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    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

    **Neither a teacher nor a native speaker.**

    Your text looks good to me, however, I'm not sure about these four things:
    (I added and highlighted them.)
    We learn the basic rules of scouting in the first three months within by the activities as a mountain bike tour, fishing and hillwalking. At the end of the third months we swear and start scouting activities. We arrange mountain and forest tours and have (an/the) opportunity to learn through having fun.

    Within looks strange to me, altough I cannot say it's definitely wrong.
    I would add an a before mountain bike tour.
    ... by the activities as a mountain bike tour, fishing and hillwalking.
    "A fishing" or "a hillwalking" seems to be wrong, but the mountain bike tour needs an a (in my opinion).

    A confirmation or some advice by other members/teachers would be very nice

    P.S. Swear?

    Cheers!


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    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

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    Last edited by Nightmare85; 05-Jun-2010 at 14:06.

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    #4

    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

    Quote Originally Posted by Gillnetter View Post
    To swear has more than one meaning. I believe that you are using it in the sense of taking an oath. The way it is written means that you curse - "This dammed bike is broken." You could write it this way, "...we swear to (be good scouts - uphold the ideals of scouting - follow the rules, and more)."
    or perhaps "we have a swearing-in ceremony"? or "We take the Scout oath". According to the Scout website, they have an Oath and a Law.

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    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

    So the sentence should be 'At the end of the third month we are sworn in'; it would make sense if you said 'At the end of the third month we take the oath', but in my memory of scouting - as the ceremony is called 'swearing-in' - the usual expression would be 'we are sworn in'.

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    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

    Quote Originally Posted by BobK View Post
    So the sentence should be 'At the end of the third month we are sworn in'

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    Hey,
    I had the same idea but did not change it.
    What if there is such an event every year?
    Let's say it always takes 4 weeks, each week a certain program.
    Can't you say: "After the 3rd weeks we begin with moubtain bike tours"? (As example).
    Does 1st, 2nd, 3rd, ..., 50th only work with singular?

    Cheers!

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    Re: please, check if there is a mistake

    - singular in this case (ordinals - 1st 2nd etc). But you could just as well say 'after [the first] three months...'.

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