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    3 sentences..need your feedback

    They were coming to terms to the tragic death of there son, when another bad news scattered there dream - there grandson died within 10 days of the birth
    It was his determination to reach the highest echelons of the organization, but he will achieve it so early no one ever imaged. its what you call hard work and smart work.
    I think my strategy back-fired me, initially I was determined not to do MBA, but after 5 years I am still at the same place, had I have done MBA, I would have been placed in decent organization.

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    Re: 3 sentences..need your feedback

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    They were coming to terms to the tragic death of their son, when another bad piece of news shattered their dream - their grandson died within 10 days of the birth
    It was (always) his determination [goal, aim, objective] to reach the highest echelons of the organization, but he will achieve it earlier than anyone ever imaged. Its what you call hard work and smart work determination.

    I think my strategy back-fired on me. Initially I was determined not to do an MBA, but after 5 years I am still at the same place. Had I have done the MBA, I would have been placed in a decent organization.
    R.

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    Re: 3 sentences..need your feedback

    Quick addition: in sentence 2, I think you meant "imagined", not "imaged".

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