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    Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

    Hi,

    Is this grammatically correct?

    Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

    Many thanks.

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    Re: Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

    ... with static electricity.

    Once you have received a shock, the electricity has passed through you. (Probably not the right description if you are a physicist, but I just mean, the action is past.)

    If you have a lot of static, your hair will stand up.

    If you are in a lightning storm and your hair starts to stand up, you are in a lot of danger!
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    ... with static electricity.

    Once you have received a shock, the electricity has passed through you. (Probably not the right description if you are a physicist, but I just mean, the action is past.)

    If you have a lot of static, your hair will stand up.

    If you are in a lightning storm and your hair starts to stand up, you are in a lot of danger!
    Thanks. So, the sentence is correct?

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    Re: Tim's hair was wild was from the shock of electricity.

    I recommend changing "from the shock of electricity" to "with static electricity."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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