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Daryl.L

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My storyboard skill is more than just quality pictures. They can tell stories which consist of introduction, climax and conclusion. This is my principle of making storyboard.



Does it make sense to you?

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My storyboard skill is more than just (designing/ sketching/ limning) quality pictures.

-I suppose by qualityyou mean abstract.

They can tell stories which consist ofan introduction, a climax and a conclusion. This is my principle of making/ outlining a storyboard.
-tell + you + stories
-Its better to say: they can depict stories...
 

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My storyboard skill is more than just good drawings. They can depict stories which consist of an introduction, a climax and a conclusion. This is my principle of making storyboard


How about this one?
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Works for me!
 

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If I understand the first part correctly you have one skill - "My storyboard skill is...". Then you state that your skill consists of more than just good drawings. I would suggest a slight change to - "My storyboard skills are about more than just good drawings."

Thank you for pointing out the part that I mislead the viewers. Now I see what my snetence should be.

I don't see how developing a storyboard has a connection with a principle.
Just because you have three main parts on your storyboards doesn't indicate that you are following any principle - this is your way of doing a job, these are the methods you use when constructing a storyboard.


I think I really have to find out how to use the word, principal, in a sentence.

Thanks!

I am going to rewrite my sentence like this......

My storyboard skills are more than just good drawings. They can depict stories which consist of an introduction, a climax and a conclusion. These are the concepts I bring into creating a storyboard.

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Be sure you know the difference between "principle" and "principal"!
 

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Opps... I mean "principle". You are very observable.
 

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Opps... I mean "principle". You are very observable.
She's observant.
I couldn't comment on whether she's observable or not.
 

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Learned a new word. Thanks!
emsr2d2 noticed that I wanted to type "principle" but I spelled it as "principal". I didn't know until she pointed it out. haha
 
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