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    An articla on Bhopal Gas tragedy.please check

    The Bhopal Gas tragedy was the ugliest in the human history. After 26 years, the Government is busy in finding odd answers to cover-up the wrong doing of his partyís ministers, who were part of the then Government to give them clean chit. Itís surprising when countryís financial minister says that the Chief Minister at that point was correct in giving a safe passage to Anderson, the main accused in the case because it was imperative to maintain law and order. Itís shocking that Arjun Singh, then chief Minister didnít get any place outside Bhopal within the territory of India. In that case you show even send Kasab, the terrorist who attacked taj hotel & Afzal guru, who attached parliament to Pakistan. How about such brainless ministers and their supporters should be send to Antarctic Island?


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    Re: An articla on Bhopal Gas tragedy.please check

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    The Bhopal Gas tragedy was the ugliest in the human history. After 26 years, the Government is busy in finding odd answers to cover-up the wrong doing of his party’s ministers, who were part of the then Government to give them clean chit. It’s surprising when country’s financial minister says that the Chief Minister at that point was correct in giving a safe passage to Anderson, the main accused in the case because it was imperative to maintain law and order. It’s shocking that Arjun Singh, then chief Minister didn’t get any place outside Bhopal within the territory of India. In that case you show even send Kasab, the terrorist who attacked taj hotel & Afzal guru, who attached parliament to Pakistan. How about such brainless ministers and their supporters should be send to Antarctic Island?
    My company specializes in proofreading and editing documents. Perhaps you should hire us for all your editing needs: Editors for Writers, Inc.

    Based on my experience as an editor, articles such as yours should be written in present tense. I kept your word usage and style consistent throughout the narrative.

    The Bhopal Gas Tragedy is one of the worst events in human history. After 26 years, the government continues to spew out fabricated lies to protect its prime ministers from blame. [insert additional content] It is surprising when the country's financial minister states that his decision to provide the Chief Minister with safe passage to Anderson is justifiable. The financial minister says, "[insert exact quote] It is imperative to maintain law and order." Furthermore, what is even more contradictory is that the previous Chief Minister, Arjun Singh, was not provided with a safe house.

    In that case you show even send Kasab, the terrorist who attacked taj hotel & Afzal guru, who attached parliament to Pakistan. (
    Could you rephrase this sentence? I am unable to decipher your meaning.)

    I have a suggestion: How about we send those brainless ministers and their supporters to Antarctica!

    Editorial Notes:

    Overall, you have written an interesting piece.

    PS - We can continue working on this article together, if you'd like.
    Last edited by Editors4Writers; 21-Jun-2010 at 22:33. Reason: Post Script

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