Can you please correct this letter

[francycham]

Mr.....joined us in the month of October as a Sales Executive. We have received all documents from Mr..., pertaining to his visa transfer to our sponsorship in the month of February 2010 and submitted to the Head Office in the same month. But so far his sponsorship has not been changed and visa not stamped in his passport. I am afraid that if this situation persists, Mr........may look for another job and join competitor, so kindly do the needful to change his sponsorship at the earliest.

[2010]

Mr.....joined us in the month of October as a Sales Executive. We have received all documents from Mr..., pertaining to his visa transfer to our sponsorship in the month of February 2010 and submitted to the Head Office in the same month. But so far his sponsorship has not been changed and visa not stamped in his passport. I am afraid that if this situation persists, Mr........ may have to look for another job and join competitor. So, kindly do the needful to Request you to change his sponsorship (at the earliest\at your earliest convenience).

====Not a teacher====

Note: "needful" is not a word in the English language.

This is a common mistake done by most of the non-native english speakers.

[Editors4Writers]

Mr.....joined us in the month of October as a Sales Executive. We have received allthe documents from Mr...pertaining to his visa transfer to our sponsorship in the month of February of 2010. These documents were and submitted then sent to the Head Office without delayinthe same month. But so far However, his sponsorship visahas not still remainsbeen unstamped and unapproved and not in his passport. I am afraid that if this situation persists, Mr........may look will be forcedfor to another seek employment and join from our competitors,. As such,so kindly do the needful to change his sponsorship at the earliest please expedite the approval process to avoid any unnecessary repercussions.

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[RonBee]

Note:
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The phrase "do the needful" is a common expression, especially in British English.

[2010]

Note:
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The phrase "do the needful" is a common expression, especially in British English.

Oh!

That sounds interesting. But, is that a word "needful"?

[RonBee]

Oh!

That sounds interesting. But, is that a word "needful"?

Yes.

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