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    Please modify my sentence

    Due to the hot weather which effected the electrical supply the factory production progress. we would like to re-schedule the inspection to 08 July afternoon. Please confirm

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    Re: Please modify my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    Due to the hot weather which effected the electrical supply the factory production progress. we would like to re-schedule the inspection to 08 July afternoon. Please confirm
    ===Not a teacher===

    Due to the hot weather which effected the electrical supply - Power outage?

    The hot weather that caused power outage has affected the factory production. Therfore, we would like to reshedule the inspection to July 8, 2010.

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    Re: Please modify my sentence

    ***neither a teacher nor a native-speaker***

    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    Due to the hot weather which effected the electrical supply the factory production progress. we would like to re-schedule the inspection to 08 July afternoon. Please confirm
    Since our power supply's been heavily compromised by the hot weather, the production of the factory has come to a halt...

    Is the above sentence similar to what you meant to say in the first place?

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    Re: Please modify my sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Zoe2008 View Post
    Due to the hot weather which effected the electrical supply the factory production progress. we would like to re-schedule the inspection to 08 July afternoon. Please confirm
    "The supply of power to our factory has been affected by the exceptionally hot weather, resulting in a loss of production, and we would therefore [be grateful if we could/like to] re-schedule the inspection to the afternoon of 8 July. Please confirm whether this is [acceptable/convenient/permissible/possible]."

    The choice of wording given in square brackets depends on the context.

    I have assumed that the power supply isn't affected throughout summer but only on days when it is exceptionally hot, and so have inserted 'exceptionally' before 'hot weather' to emphasise the unusualness of the circumstances.

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