[Essay] Please be nice and correct my final essay exam

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mouh2k77

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In this age the Advertisement invents our daily life events . it spread by media and affects our way of living in good and bad ways ,it invented for one main reason, the money. every commercial advertisement made to influence our life .
On the first hand the good affect of advertisement is the knowledge. this age is full of new inventions that influence our life ,so itcome and playing a key role to explaining this new inventions to the public and learning them about its benefits and the good way to using its. The advertisement so important media tool that educate people .
On the second hand the bad affect of advertisement is losing of money . advertisements attracting people to buy the useless products by its attractive themes , sound effects, we always buy unnecessary things and spend our salary because the main faction of reclaims is to increasing the sales rate . advertisement invent as a sailing mean to increase the sales by modern way .
All in all , the Advertisements as new media theme had good and bad effects. Not all Advertisements bad our aiming to draw money from people pockets . for example the Advertisements of new medicine treatments .
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Hope this helps a little. You sort of lost me in your last paragraph.
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[STRIKE]In this age the Advertisement [/STRIKE]These days, advertising [STRIKE]invents[/STRIKE] invades our daily lives [STRIKE]life events [/STRIKE]. It is forced upon us by the media and affects our way of living in both good and bad ways. It is used [STRIKE]invented[/STRIKE] for one main reason, [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] money. Every commercial advertisement is made to influence our life .
On [STRIKE]the first [/STRIKE]one hand, the [STRIKE]good[/STRIKE]positive affect of advertising is [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]knowledge[/STRIKE]information. This age is full of new inventions that influence our [STRIKE]life[/STRIKE]lives. So, that information plays a key role in explaining [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] new inventions to the public and informs them about the benefits of products and services. [STRIKE]The advertisement so important media tool that educate people .
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On the [STRIKE]second [/STRIKE]other hand, the [STRIKE]bad[/STRIKE]negative affect of advertising is [STRIKE]losing[/STRIKE]wasting [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] money . Advertising influences people to buy [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] useless products by its attractive themes , sound effects and graphics.
Sometimes we [STRIKE]always[/STRIKE] buy unnecessary things and spend our [STRIKE]salary[/STRIKE]money foolishly. All in all , [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Advertising as a media [STRIKE]theme[/STRIKE]tool [STRIKE]had[/STRIKE] has good and bad effects. Not all advertising is bad, [STRIKE]our aiming [/STRIKE]such as advertising new medical products and the aim is not only to draw money from people's pockets . So, we all should make intelligent decisions about how we react to advertising.[STRIKE]for example the Advertisements of new medicine treatments .
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