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    #1

    revising of two sentences

    Dear teachers,

    Would you be kind enough to share with me your opinion concerning the following sentences?

    1. When shot, he was apparently taking a walk.

    2. He was shot and killed after he and another man, both of whom were armed with guns, went to a shop in Stony Hill about 10:20 p.m.

    Thanks for your efforts.

    Regards,

    V.

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    Re: revising of two sentences

    They both look good to me, Vil.

    Rover

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