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    Check My Sentence Please

    The real orphan is not the one who is bereft of father and mother, is the one who is bereft of intelligence.

    Is it gramnatically correct?

    How can I shorten it? Too many is...

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Quote Originally Posted by Volcano1985 View Post
    The real orphan is not the one who is bereft of a father and mother, is but the one who is bereft of intelligence.

    Is it grammatically correct?

    How can I shorten it? Too many is...
    See above for amendments.

    To shorten it? How about "Lacking intelligence makes one more of an orphan than lacking parents"?

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    Re: Check My Sentence Please

    Thank you

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