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    Title sentence

    Hi,

    While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

    'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and exotic variety of orchids and flowers.

    Thanks for correcting this.

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Pal_slg View Post
    Hi,

    While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

    'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against a stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and an exotic variety (or "exotic varieties" with no article) of orchids and flowers.

    Thanks for correcting this.

    Pal
    See above.

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Pal_slg View Post
    Hi,

    While describing a place in a short title sentence can the following be accepted?

    'Name of the place' - A famous hill station in the Himalayas with historical mythology against stunning backdrop of mighty Himalayan peaks and colourful country side, with old monasteries, churches, vibrant hill tribes, colonial buildings and exotic variety of orchids and flowers.

    Thanks for correcting this.

    Pal
    It's not a sentence.
    I'm not sure of the role of
    'Name of the place' in this text. Such constructions don't belong in essays. This might be acceptable in a newspaper article or a travelogue.
    Besides, after the lengthy description, you haven't even named the place.



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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    It's not a sentence.
    I'm not sure of the role of
    'Name of the place' in this text. Such constructions don't belong in essays. This might be acceptable in a newspaper article or a travelogue.
    Besides, after the lengthy description, you haven't even named the place.


    I assumed that in the finished article, "Name of the place" would be replaced with the actual name of the place!

    Brighton - a seaside town famous for its Pavilion and pier.

    If that is the case, then a capital "A" is not required, but lower case. I missed that the first time.

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    I assumed that in the finished article, "Name of the place" would be replaced with the actual name of the place!

    Brighton - a seaside town famous for its Pavilion and pier.

    If that is the case, then a capital "A" is not required, but lower case. I missed that the first time.
    Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.
    Agreed, but as a title it would work don't you think? Maybe I don't mean a title! I wouldn't have a problem with it as the first sentence of an article about a specific place.

    Failing that, of course, if the dash is replaced with "is", then it's a sentence.

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Oh, I see. It still wouldn't be a sentence though, but maybe a sentence isn't needed.
    Infact I wanted to describe a place named Darjeeling, a popular tourist place in the Himalayas. But before going for a long essay i wanted to give a tiltle for it. The word 'is' was not used intentionally. Is it better to break the long sentence into several short ones?

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    Re: Title sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Pal_slg View Post
    Infact I wanted to describe a place named Darjeeling, a popular tourist place in the Himalayas. But before going for a long essay i wanted to give a tiltle for it. The word 'is' was not used intentionally. Is it better to break the long sentence into several short ones?
    The paragraph that you posted originally would be too long for a title, though!

    If the title was perhaps "Darjeeling - a popular place in the Himalayas", and the rest of the post was the actual article, then that would be better.

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