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    Against these considerations one can argue that the aforementioned advanced systems of rockets and guided missiles, as well as other modern weapon systems, will be very accurate, and enjoy high ability of demolition and penetration. They can easily be hidden and camouflaged, thus, the risks and difficulties which usually occur while operating warplanes and pilots - will be avoided. The cost of a single warplane which might be shot down may reach dozens of millions, in addition to the pilot's life and the precious resources invested in his training.

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    Re: Thank you for checking

    Quote Originally Posted by motico View Post
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    Against these considerations one can argue that the aforementioned advanced systems of rockets and guided missiles, as well as other modern weapon systems, will be very accurate, and possess great ability to destroy and penetrate.

    They can easily be hidden and camouflaged. Thus, the risks and difficulties which usually occur while operating warplanes and pilots will be avoided.

    The cost of a single warplane, which might be shot down, may reach dozens of millions of pounds (dollars), in addition to the pilot's life and the precious resources invested in his training.
    Those are my suggestions.

    Separating your points into short sections make your text easier to read than when it is presented in a solid block of print.

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    Re: Thank you for checking

    Thank you very much !

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