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I can clearly remember (a/one) freezing night.-I prefer one. Good for storytelling.
I was looking at the clock, because I knew a few hours (were/ had been) left (to/till) the crack of dawn.
-...I knew it was only a few hours (remaining) till dawn.
The howling of the wolves could be heard (from/within) the heart of the mountain . Once I opened the door, the cries/howling of the blizzard made me close it again.
-heart of the mountain: this is a body-organ-as-place Persian metaphor. The reader would understand it (because we have the metaphor in English too), but to be more certain:
-The howling of the wolves could be heard from the very centre of the mountain.
I cleaned the steam off the only window of our small room, but I couldn't see anything through/in [I would use through] the darkness except for a faint/dim stream of light flickering / twinkling /glittering / shimmering from a distance/ from afar.
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