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    7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    I need a help. Can any teacher proofread these two stories? Yes, They can. I am sure.
    7) Hassan helps
    Hassan saw a blind man who was having a box and trying to cross the street. The cars were filling the street. Hassan went to the blind man and took the box from him. Then he caught his hand and passed him to the other side. The blind man raised his hands to the heaven then said “oh my God, save this guy and succeed him in his homework.

    8) My father and my mother
    Oh my God, the generous who donates all the blessing. This is my father, the best father. For us how he tires. And my mother bless her and as same as her for her kindness. Oh my god, bless and save them for us.

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    Re: 7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    Quote Originally Posted by atchan View Post
    7) Hassan helps
    Hassan saw a blind man who was having a box and trying to cross the street. The cars were filling the street. Hassan went to the blind man and took the box from him. Then he caught his hand and passed him to the other side. The blind man raised his hands to the heaven then said “oh my God, save this guy and succeed him in his homework.

    8) My father and my mother
    Oh my God, the generous who donates all the blessing. This is my father, the best father. For us how he tires. And my mother bless her and as same as her for her kindness. Oh my god, bless and save them for us.
    My suggestions are:

    Hassan helps: Hassan saw a blind man carrying a box, trying to cross the street. The street was full of cars. Hassan went and took the box from him. He took his hand and helped him to the other side. The blind man raised his hands to Heaven and said "Oh God, save this man and help him succeed in his ????????" (homework is the work you are given to do at home, by your teacher).

    My father and mother: Oh generous God, who blesses us all. Bless my father, the best father, for how he tires himself for us. And bless my mother for her kindness. Oh my God, bless and save them.

    I assume your second piece is meant to be a prayer of some description.

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    Re: 7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    My suggestions are:

    Hassan helps
    Hassan saw a blind man carrying a box, trying to cross the street. The street was full of cars. Hassan went and took the box from him. He took his hand and helped him to the other side. The blind man raised his hands to Heaven and said "Oh God, save this man and help him succeed in his ????????" study (homework is the work you are given to do at home, by your teacher).

    My father and mother
    Oh generous God, who blesses us all. Bless my father, the best father, for how he tires himself for us. And bless my mother for her kindness. Oh my God, bless and save them.

    I assume your second piece is meant to be a prayer of some description.Yes, that right.
    Thank you very much.

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    Re: 7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    How did the blind man know that Hassan was a student? Would he not be more likely to say something like "Please help him succeed in everything he does"?

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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    How did the blind man know that Hassan was a student? Because he was a child and it is obviously known that children study at school.
    Would he not be more likely to say something like "Please help him succeed in everything he does"? No, I don’t think so. He just desired to help him.
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    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    How did the blind man know that Hassan was a student? Because he was a child and it is obviously known that children study at school.
    Would he not be more likely to say something like "Please help him succeed in everything he does"? No, I don’t think so. He just desired to help him.
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    1) Where in your post did it say that Hassan is a child? I suppose it's possible that if Hassan is very young, then the blind man would have noticed that Hassan has very small hands when he held his hand to cross the road. According to your story, the two did not have a conversation on the way across the road so the blind man cannot have worked it out that way.

    2) If he's a child, why did your original post say that the blind man said "Please help this guy"? "Guy" is a colloquial term for a man, or at the very most, a teenager. I certainly assumed you meant "man", which is why I would not expect him to have homework, or at least I would not expect the blind man to think he would have homework.

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    Re: 7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    1) Where in your post did it say that Hassan is a child? I suppose it's possible that if Hassan is very young, then the blind man would have noticed that Hassan has very small hands when he held his hand to cross the road. According to your story, the two did not have a conversation on the way across the road so the blind man cannot have worked it out that way. Before I translate

    2) If he's a child, why did your original post say that the blind man said "Please help this guy"? "Guy" is a colloquial term for a man, or at the very most, a teenager. I certainly assumed you meant "man", which is why I would not expect him to have homework, or at least I would not expect the blind man to think he would have homework.
    Before I translated this Arabic tale to English I studied it well. There were a picture on the top of the story which appeared a blind man and a child. Really I blundered when I was translating. I said a guy rather than a child!

    I utilized from your last post because I realized that a “guy” is a colloquial term for a man, or at the very most, a teenager. In the past I thought that a guy means all masculine levels including a child. Really you are a helpful person. Thank you.

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    Quote Originally Posted by atchan View Post
    Before I translated this Arabic tale to English I studied it well. There were was a picture on at the top of the story which appeared showed a blind man and a child. Really, I blundered when I was translating. I said a guy rather than a child!

    I utilized from Your last post was useful because I realized now know that a “guy” is a colloquial term for a man, or at the very most, a teenager. In the past I thought that a guy means all masculine levels including a child. Really You are a helpful person. Thank you.
    You're welcome! It's important to remember when you post here that the only information we have is what you write! We didn't know there was a picture of a child and there was no way for us to work that out.

    That's why context and full sentences etc are vital.

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    Re: 7) Hassan helps - 8) My Parents

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    You're welcome! It's important to remember when you post here that the only information we have is what you write! We didn't know there was a picture of a child and there was no way for us to work that out.

    That's why context and full sentences etc are vital.
    The more I write something in English, the more I do mistakes. Anyway, I will try to explain what I write. Thank you.

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