I would make the following changes, please note I'm not a teacher.
The article " Daddy Tucked the Blanket " by Randall Williams explains how the severity of his childhood poverty affected him.
William grew up in hellish conditions because of the poverty he and his family endured. He lived in an old house, where many of his family slept in the same room. The house wasn't clean and there was no air conditioning or heating. Usually, he woke up every morning and found plaster on his face, from where it had fallen out the ceiling during the night. Although they still loved their children, William's parents were divorced. William was ashamed of where he lived.
Thankfully, my living conditions were different from the authors. For example, I lived in a big house, where my family all had individual bedrooms. My parents were financially independent and stable. Also my parents had a caring nature, were still living together and deeply in love.
Like I said I'm not a teacher but this reads better to me anyway.
Hope this helps, if you need anything feel free to ask.
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