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Hi teachers, I need these two stories to be proofread. Thank you in advance.9) Khalid
This is Khalid. He is a hardworking student and ranges seven-year old. He goes to school and study in the second class. His hair is clean, and so are his clothes and books. He goes to school early, and walks in a pavement, and doesnít play in the street. He studies in his school the Quran, reading, writing, mathematics, and science. He likes his school and feels happiness within it.
10) My book
My book is new, clean and beautiful. Its papers are white and its bind is clean. There are in my book a lot of pictures which I ponder and study of it. I save my book and doesnít tear, write on and throw its bind, but I save it in my bag. My book is useful and valuable. There is within it knowledges, decencies and stories. Itís my best friend.
In your first paragraph, I cannot see the relation between "He goes to school early" and "He walks on the pavement and doesn't play in the street". They don't seem to be connected (as ideas) so putting them in the same sentence seems odd.
I take care of my book so that it doesn’t tear, write on and throw its binding (I have no idea what you mean by the underlined part) I mean that “I don’t tear and write something on the binding, and don't throw the book”.
I don’t tear its binding.
I don’t write something on the binding.
I don’t throw the book on the floor.
So how can I push them together to make a sentence?
Last edited by Atchan; 05-Aug-2010 at 01:01.