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I have translated a piece of text from Persian to English. Would you please correct it for me?
I could hear my father's breathes fading away. His coughs and snores (woud worry/worried) me more and more. I pulled the blanket up (to/untill) his neck and moved around the ashes on the charcoals to make to make them warmer, but the (appalling/terrible/awful) frost outside the house would trivialise their warmth. The wall was made of decayed wood, which the only things supporting them were (corroded/rusty) nails (creaking/squeaking/groaning) with every wind (that blew/blowing).
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