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    marriage

    Please correct where you need correction.

    Sarooj also got $ 1,000 from us on 3rd February 2010 for her niece’s marriage. Sarooj needs financial help for his uncle's operation and he approched two trust to get monetory help. I dont know why he should aprroch and has not get any help one of them.

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    Re: marriage

    Quote Originally Posted by meela View Post
    Please correct where you need correction necessary.

    Sarooj also got $1,000 from us on 3rd February 2010 for her niece’s marriage. Sarooj needs financial help for his her uncle's operation and he approached two trusts to get monetary help. I dont know why he should approach and has not get any help one of them. (This sentence doesn't make any sense. Please see below.)


    I am confused. I assume Sarooj is female, as you said "her niece's marriage". However, you then said "for his uncle's operation". I assumed that you were correct the first time and changed "his" to "her".

    However, it then became very confusing. You said "...he approached two trusts..." Did her uncle approach two trusts? Also, the last sentence is very confusing. Do you not understand why he approached them? Or do you not understand why he has not received help from either of them?

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    Re: marriage

    I would guess that it is the latter, though from the outside it may appear illogical.

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    Re: marriage

    Sarooj is male.

    He got some financial assistance for his niece's marriage. Now his approching us to get some help for operation of his uncle. At the same time for same purpose he approched an other trust. I am reporting to my boss about his dual standard. So I wrote in my previous note that I dont understand why he approch an other trust to get same amount. He failed to get any amount out of them.

    I hope you understand what I am trying to write.

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    Re: marriage

    Quote Originally Posted by meela View Post
    Sarooj previously received $1,000 from us on 3rd February 2010 for his niece’s marriage. Sarooj needs financial help for his uncle's operation and he has approached two trusts to get monetary help. I don't know why he would approach multiple trusts. He has not received any help from the other trust.

    previously received = sounds more formal

    no space between $ and number

    his = gender agrees with Sarooj, not the niece

    has approached = better choice of tense

    trusts = correct plural form

    monetary = correct spelling

    don't = requires an apostrophe as it is a contraction of "do not"

    I've basically rewritten the final line for you. I've split it into two sentences and tried to make it a bit clearer. I hope it's useful for you.





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