elvis93
Junior Member
- Joined
- Jul 27, 2010
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Albanian
- Home Country
- Albania
- Current Location
- Italy
Good evening guys!!!
Could you please correct my report? It's the first report I've ever written so I'll be grateful to you if you give me your opinions about what I should improve.
Thank you in advance
That is the task:
Your school intends to open a café/shop for students and staff on the school's premises.
The headmaster has asked your class to conduct a survey and write a report.
He wants to know waht students and teachers would like the shop to sell,when it should be open and where in the school it should be situated.
This is my answer:
To: Mr Fox, headmaster of the “Pearl High School”
From: Elvis Hysa, student
Date: 12 August 2010
Subject: The results of the survey about the C4 café-shop
The purpose of this report is to give information about students' and teachers' requests which are related to the C4 opening.
I have recently conducted a survey which shows the following results.
1 Items which should be sold
The majority of requested items relates to the school material such as pens, pencils, rubbers, pencil cases and so on.
It would be also perfect if, beyond selling these items, C4 staff could serve some sneaks which might be had by students during the coffee break.
On the other hand, it is also true that at the beginning it may be a bit expensive but if the project works well, the school will only take advantages.
2 Ideal location and time opening
Students agree with teachers about the venue convenience.
Consequently, in our opinion, it would be worth setting the C4 in the middle of the school, at the third floor, in order to be equidistant from all the classrooms.
Finally, it would be better to open the C4 on 1 October in order to get its services for all the school year.
Could you please correct my report? It's the first report I've ever written so I'll be grateful to you if you give me your opinions about what I should improve.
Thank you in advance
That is the task:
Your school intends to open a café/shop for students and staff on the school's premises.
The headmaster has asked your class to conduct a survey and write a report.
He wants to know waht students and teachers would like the shop to sell,when it should be open and where in the school it should be situated.
This is my answer:
To: Mr Fox, headmaster of the “Pearl High School”
From: Elvis Hysa, student
Date: 12 August 2010
Subject: The results of the survey about the C4 café-shop
The purpose of this report is to give information about students' and teachers' requests which are related to the C4 opening.
I have recently conducted a survey which shows the following results.
1 Items which should be sold
The majority of requested items relates to the school material such as pens, pencils, rubbers, pencil cases and so on.
It would be also perfect if, beyond selling these items, C4 staff could serve some sneaks which might be had by students during the coffee break.
On the other hand, it is also true that at the beginning it may be a bit expensive but if the project works well, the school will only take advantages.
2 Ideal location and time opening
Students agree with teachers about the venue convenience.
Consequently, in our opinion, it would be worth setting the C4 in the middle of the school, at the third floor, in order to be equidistant from all the classrooms.
Finally, it would be better to open the C4 on 1 October in order to get its services for all the school year.
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