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[leeds]

Dear Jhon,
We have requested the report of Club PBX which was reported down two times. kindly send a report and mention the root cause of PBX failure
Regards

 

[emsr2d2]

Dear Jhon,
We have requested the report of Club PBX which was reported down two times. kindly send a report and mention the root cause of PBX failure
Regards

Dear John

We have requested a report on Club PBX which has been reported as not working (or "faulty") twice. Please send a report detailing the root cause of the failure.

Thank you.