I am optimistic about the future. Maybe one reason why I am optimistic is because I have just come back from Brazil. Brazil has its problems and racism does exist in Brazil like everywhere you go, but its people,
however,do not discriminate. There are somany different religions, different cultures, traditions, soand many types of skin 'scolour. It is a very diverse and cosmopolitan place where differences are completely accepted ,and where people tend to be very curious and interested in strangers. We definite vely have lots of things to learn from it.
ConcerningWhen it comes to Europe, and particularly England, itwe willstill face a number of challenges, and we willhave to do our best to deal with our identities, and to know ourselves better in order to be able to cope with others, be they black or white, or from different cultures or religions, because I agree with Aimé Césaire that ‘‘it is good to place different civilizations in contact with each other; that whatever its own particular genius may be, a civilization that withdraws into itself atrophies; that for civilizations, exchange is oxygen…”.
I hope my suggestions help. Overall, I think it was very good - but that last sentence is very long. Maybe you could think about breaking it into two sentences instead?
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