pls help with this sentence for my job recruiter

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dagger88

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i want to send my job recruiter an email:

Hello xyz,

i just wanted to check up with you if you had any positions available for me.

thanks

tony
 

Nightmare85

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Hi,
I believe there are plenty of possible options here.
I would write it this way:

1)
Hello xyz,

I would like to know if you have any positions for me.

Best regards,

Tony


2)
Hello xyz,

I would like to know if there are any positions available for me.

Best regards,

Tony


Maybe some other members have better ideas than I.

P.S. Keep in mind to use capital letters.

Cheers!
 

dagger88

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^ those are good.

also i was thinking.

hello xyz,

are there any positions available for me?

i want to make is sound less formal, because she had in previous email called me "hey tony"
 

emsr2d2

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Before anyone makes any other suggestions, I would really like to see you rewrite your post, using capitalisation as necessary.
 

dagger88

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Before anyone makes any other suggestions, I would really like to see you rewrite your post, using capitalisation as necessary.

Hello xyz,

Are there any positions available for me?

Regards,

Tony
 

emsr2d2

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Hello xyz,

Are there any positions available for me?

Regards,

Tony

Dear [name]

I am writing to enquire if you have found any suitable positions for me.

Thank you, and I look forward to hearing from you.

[Your name]
 
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