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    Please help me correct this text

    I've just watched a film named "Diary of a wimpy kid" and I wrote this text introduce about the content of this film.
    Please help me correct it.
    Thanks everybody!
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    There're a lot of movie about middle school and kid and I've just watched a nice film named "Diary of a wimpy kid".
    That's very interesting!
    It told about two kids Grey and Rowley.
    Grey is a active kid but he don't know how to make friend.
    While Rowley is a big kid. Yeah but he is funny and very natural.
    Grey and Rowley join in the new class at middle school.
    In this class there're many special kid. Some kid give oneself airs. Some kid are shy...But they're all nice kid.
    All the things began when Rowley broke his hand and the fault was Grey.
    But then Rowley become a hot boy. A famous kid because he is funny. He also is a cartoon artist.
    Then Grey was envy with Rowley and their friendship was broken.
    After many things misunderstand, final they're best friends.
    That's a nice story.
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    Re: Please help me correct this text

    Quote Originally Posted by neo0 View Post
    I've just watched a film named "Diary of a Wimpy Kid" and I wrote this text to introduce about the content of this film.
    Please help me correct it.
    Thanks everybody!
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    There are a lot of movies about middle school (or high school) and kids, and I've just watched a nice film named called "Diary of a Wimpy Kid".
    That's It was very interesting!
    It told tells about the story of two kids, Grey and Rowley.
    Grey is an active kid but he doesn't know how to make friends, while Rowley is just a big kid Yeah but he is funny and very natural.
    Grey and Rowley join in the a new class at middle school.
    In this class there are many special kids. Some kids give oneself themselves airs, some kids are shy but they're all nice kids.
    All the things beganThe story really starts when Rowley broke breaks his hand and the fault was Grey and it's Grey's fault.
    But then Rowley becomes a hot ("hot" is usually understood to mean "very handsome/sexy") boy. He's a famous kid because he is funny. He is also a cartoonist.
    Then Grey was becomes envy with envious of Rowley and their friendship was broken breaks down.
    After many things misunderstandings, final they're finally they become best friends again.
    That's It's a nice story.
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    Please see above for some amendments and queries.

    Remember that you need an "s" in order to pluralise "kid".
    You need to stick with one tense. It is common with film summaries to use the present tense.
    Although we use "There're" frequently when speaking, it's not usual to use it when writing.

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    Re: Please help me correct this text

    I understand and I'll remember your correction.
    Thanks a lot!

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