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Could you proofreading this story
Glory of God that who makes fate of the person in others hands. I’m not matted and I am not sensitive but, don’t blame me, what I saw made me feel that the life have no mercy. I saw young girl crying with the sadness out of her eyes. She came to me with tears and hug me strongly . My heart felt that she has painful story. I said to her cry, cry and cry maybe this relieve you. Suddenly she spoke and said “ I thought that he was loves me, goodness and his heart like diamond. Then I found out that he is a deceptive. I loved him and my love was immeasurably. I thought that I was princess but I was worthless in his eyes. I sold my family and my friends even people for sake of his eyes. He took from me what he want then he sold me. I hope that he killed me before he showed me his other face. Why he tramples on the heart of an innocent”. I said to her calm down nothing deserve your tears. Hope God give you someone else who give you the love, respectable and happiness that you dreamed, someone who understand you, take care of you, loves you and love the sand that you walk on it. Just remember that is nothing impossible in this life.
Thank you alots
Last edited by A2R..; 27-Aug-2010 at 22:07.
Not only humans can have "other faces". If you say, "Europe is showing its sympathetic face", you may mean that Europe has also another face - the mean one.
I understood now
so can I say ( he showed me his real face) ??
Thank you alot
I think you can say that. But what you said, "he showed me his other face", is OK too. But maybe you'd better wait for native speaker's help.
Last edited by birdeen's call; 28-Aug-2010 at 22:49.
Can any native speaker's or English teachers help me??!!
Last edited by A2R..; 29-Aug-2010 at 21:09.
I do not understand your some expressions clearly, listed above. That's probably my bad so don't worry at all.
Glory of God that who makes fate of the person in others hands.
Even after correction, I could not catch the mean.
Glory of GodThe glory God that who makes fate of the person in others' hands.
Second one is,
"I sold my family and my friends even people for sake of his eyes. He took from me what he wants after that he sold me"
My best guess is that means could be "replace someone with a little gain from another one".
(However, I know that I need correction on my sentences, do it:)
Last edited by wq.denis; 02-Sep-2010 at 00:19.
The glory of God refer to exclamation it mean (how can God make your fate in other person hand) whatever if it was good or bad
This topic sentence prelude to the beginning of the story
About the second one I mean that she left and ignored her family, friends and people for sake of him (lover). so that what I meant
I hope now it is clear
if you have any question feel free to ask
And me too wq.denis I think I need corrections
We are here to learn
Last edited by A2R..; 01-Sep-2010 at 22:23.