[Essay] Just one sentence need correction

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Moonwalker

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There was a question in a Toeic book
Q. Wht kind of advertisements do you pay the most attention to?

Could you correct any errors or awakard expressions plz?

A. I like advertisments with specific information about the product's features showing what is differnt from its competitve products.
 

UnstoppableBeast

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A. I like advertisments with specific information about the product's features showing what is differnt from its competitve products.

You expressed your opinion extremely well. I was only able to notice several mistakes.

I like advertisments with specific information about the product's features,
for example: information about what makes it different from competitive products.

OR

I like advertisments with specific information about the product's features which shows what is different from its competitors.


The first part worked well; however the last part was awkward and did not flow off the tongue very well. Try saying it aloud and see if it makes sense.
 

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I like advertisments with specific information about the product's features and their difference from competitors.
 
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