Thank you very much for correcting my Essay, that was really helpful, I really appreciate the effort :)
I want to ask you a few questions regarding the grammar in my Essay.
Whom, you change it to "who" ? why? and when do we use whom ?
Finally, I hope you can give me a very good vocabulary that I can use in my Essay, or will it be better to use other vocabulary than the ones I used in my Essay ?
Student or Learner