[FONT="]Can someone please read and edit my short story? Around 500 words[/FONT]
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[FONT="]A Free Murderer[/FONT]
[FONT="]By, Chengcheng Guo[/FONT]
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[FONT="]I was only 8 years old when it happened, and it was during my third spring in [/FONT][FONT="]Canada[/FONT][FONT="] while I was living in an apartment building with my dad and grandma. But what made this year different than the others was that throughout this year we had received a lot of junk, which mostly all piled on the balcony because our storage was already full. With all this extra junk, it made a perfect nesting place for birds. I can’t even begin to tell you how many times my dad told me not to brother the birds, touch them, leave them alone and how we were going to clean up after them when they had left. But considering that I was still a little kid, I was way to curious, seeing all those birds fly in the sky, I had always dreamed of flying with them by the way, and there were ones hatching on our balcony right now, How could I resist? I thought this was going to be a one in a life chance, to see real wild baby birds. So one day when everyone went out I went to the balcony. The next thing I did was totally an accident, I swear I didn’t know it would have happened the way it did. I was just going to go pet the birds and maybe even feed it some food, but I didn’t know that they would try to run away from me and fall off the balcony. To bring even more bad news I lived on the 16th floor, and the bird didn’t know how to fly, so it didn’t have much of a chance. I stared at the helpless young bird that had just lost everything because I decided to invade its home, as it fell and got crushed by gravity. [/FONT]
[FONT="]I stared down to the bury shape that resembles a bird as I thought about what I had done, I didn’t know what to do. This had never happened to me, with the expectation of killing a few small bugs, I had never killed anything weather on purpose or by accident in my life. I was in a state of shock, and that’s when it hit me, I realized what I had done. I was a criminal, a murderer some might say, I had not only taken the life of someone else, not listening to others advice, and also not thinking about what I was doing to the poor little thing. I was upset for almost a week, I didn’t tell anyone about what I had done though. Then it came to me, I knew what I had to do, I had and still have to listen to other, not to be selfish, and think about what I’m about to do before I do it. I had never gotten around telling my dad but my grandma had caught on, but after I told her what I learned after this incident she decided to keep this little accident a secret from my dad if I promised to do as I said. I was ready to chance, determined inside, I had a goal and I was ready to reach it no matter what. To this day I almost always listen to my dad and always think about what I’m doing before approaching it![/FONT]
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[FONT="]Any thing that i should add, or doesn't make sense. By the way i suck at English and I'm in grade 11...so please tell me if this is good enough thanks you!
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