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    Please help me to correct these sentences

    Dear Sir,
    We are a well established advertising company in the region. We are working in this field since [year]. We would like to inform you that we have now got a unique opportunity to serve you in the advertisement filed which would hep you to improve your business never before.
    Your advertisement will be displayed on our LCD panel which is located at each counter at the Metro stations from xxxx to xxx
    We, M/S xxxx can only do this work as awarded by our Metro Department. Kindly note that the spaces are limited so please place your order at the earliest.
    All orders will be treated based on first come first service so do not wait till the end and fetch this rare opportunity to make your business wonderful.

    Awaiting your valuable order



    In case of any clarification, please feel free to contact undersigned.

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    Re: Please help me to correct these sentences

    /A learner/

    Quote Originally Posted by JRD View Post
    Dear Sir,
    We are a regional well-established advertising company. We've been working in this field since [year]. We would like to inform you that we have now got a unique opportunity to serve you in the advertisement filed which would help you improve your business as never before.
    Your advertisement will be displayed on our LCD panels which are located at every counter at the Metro stations from xxxx to xxx.
    M/S xxxx is a company that is authorised by the Metro Department. Kindly note that the spaces are limited so please place your order at the earliest.
    All orders will be treated by way of "first come - first service" so do not wait till the end but get this rare opportunity to make your business successful.

    Awaiting your valuable order

    In case of any clarification, please feel free to contact the undersigned.
    As, is.

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    Re: Please help me to correct these sentences

    A few suggestions:

    Quote Originally Posted by JRD View Post
    Dear Sir,

    We are a well established advertising company in the region. We are have been working in this field since [year]. We would like to inform you that we have now got now have a unique opportunity to serve you in the advertisement filedfield of commercial advertising which wouldcould hephelp you to improve your business as never before.
    Your advertisement willwould be displayed on our LCD panel which is located at each counter atin the Metro stations from xxxx to xxx
    We, M/S xxxx can only do this work as awarded by our Metro Department. Kindly note that the spaces are limited, so please place your order at the earliest.
    All orders will be treated based processed on a first come, first serviceserved basis so do not wait till the endall spaces have been reserved to take advantage of this rare opportunity to make your business wonderfulthrive.

    Awaiting your valuable order



    If you need more information, please feel free to contact undersigned.

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