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    Thumbs down Correct these sentenecse!

    1. Tonight the moon is full which it reminds me of how I used to go fishing for flounder with my uncle

    2.We knew— everybody in the village knew—that floundering was the best on a moonless night, but we choosed the moon anyway.
    3.On full-moon nights when moon was round and a circular disk, blue crabs settled into muddly recesses and shed these crusty shells.
    4.As our boat slid silently through the shadow water, we watched in lantern light not only for the outline of buried flounder, therefore also for the salt, quited crabs.
    5.Our spear was ready for flounder our net was ready for crab. We always caught a few of each.
    6.My uncles eyes were sharper than mine, better trained. He would whisper, ”Look. There.” I will look where he pointed, see nothing but the sandy bottom
    7. Then he would raise the spear, plunge it into the sand, and lift a flopping flounder into the boat.
    8.The crabs were easier to catch because they couldn’t escape. As quickly as founder, I learned how to dip from bellow, make a quick capture, and place the crab gently into a bucket.
    9.What I can really dig about those days and nights is how the moonlight dumped some glitter over the water, how we went gliding through quietness, always searching, searching.
    10.
    Tonight as I look up at the full moon, I am many miles, many years from water, from home.

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    Re: Correct these sentenecse!

    Welcome to the board, vohung.

    A polite request would attract more response than a bossy command.

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    My try
    Quote Originally Posted by vohung39 View Post
    1. Tonight the moon's full which reminds me of how I used to go fishing for flounder with my uncle.
    2.We knew— everybody in the village knew—that floundering (could stay in the context) was the best on a moonless night but we chose the moon anyway.
    3.On the full-moon nights when moon is of a round and circular disk shape, blue crabs settle into muddle recesses and the light shed these crusty shells.
    4.As our boat slid silently over the dark water, we watched in lantern light not only for the outline of a bit buried flounder therefore also for the edible crabs.
    5.Our spear was ready for the flounder and our net was ready for the crab. We could catch a few of each every time we went there.
    6.My uncle's eyes were sharper and better trained than mine. He would whisper,'Look! There!' I would look where he pointed but seeing nothing but the sandy bottom.
    7. Then he would raise the spear, plunge it into the sand and lift a flopping flounder into the boat.
    8.The crabs were easier to catch because they couldn’t escape. As quickly as founder(?), I learned how to dip my bucket bellow the crabs, make a quick capture placing the crab gently into the bucket.
    9.What I can really dig about those days and nights is how the moonlight was dumping some glitter over the water while we were gliding through quietness, searching and searching.
    10.Tonight as I look at the full moon, I am many miles, many years from home and on the water.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    Welcome to the board, vohung.

    A polite request would attract more response than a bossy command.

    Rover
    I do strongly agree. I don't know why someone could have that behavior while requesting for help.

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    The politeness opens many doors but one must speak pretty good English to get into position to express yourself in a polite way, mustn't he?

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    Re: Correct these sentenecse!

    This is perhaps a textbook home work exercise? The sentences are mostly correct but an incorrect word has been used or an unnecessary word added.

    1. Tonight the moon is full which it reminds me of how I used to go fishing for flounder with my uncle

    2. We knew— everybody in the village knew—that floundering was the best on a moonless night, but we choosed the moon anyway.
    3. On full-moon nights when moon was round and a circular disk, blue crabs settled into muddly recesses and shed these crusty shells.
    4. As our boat slid silently through the shadow water, we watched in lantern light not only for the outline of buried flounder, therefore also for the salt, quited crabs.
    5. Our spear was ready for flounder ; our net was ready for crab. We always caught a few of each.
    6. My uncle's eyes were sharper than mine, better trained. He would whisper, ”Look. There.” I will look where he pointed, see nothing but the sandy bottom
    7. Then he would raise the spear, plunge it into the sand, and lift a flopping flounder into the boat.
    8. The crabs were easier to catch because they couldn’t escape. As quickly as founder, I learned how to dip from bellow, make a quick capture, and place the crab gently into a bucket.
    9. What I can really dig about those days and nights is how the moonlight dumped some glitter over the water, how we went gliding through quietness, always searching, searching.
    10. Tonight as I look up at the full moon, I am many miles, many years from water, from home.

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    Quote Originally Posted by e2e4 View Post
    The politeness opens many doors but one must speak pretty good English to get into position to express yourself in a polite way, mustn't he?
    I thought of that, e2e4, but the standard of English in the sentences we were told to correct is pretty good, leading me to suppose that the OP should have heard the word 'please'.

    EDIT: I've just read Koronas's post. I'm sure he/she is right. It's homework.

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    Hi Everyone!
    I aplogize because I "missed" the reason for helping me correct these sentences. Also, I want to say thank you to everybody who help me, and I espect everybody welcome me to attent to the Forum!
    "Those sentences aren't my homework! They are my practices!". I will never post my homeworks to ask everyone unless Igot the authorization from my professor!
    Thank you!
    Last edited by vohung39; 24-Sep-2010 at 04:45.

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    Re: Correct these sentenecse!

    You're welcome vohung39.

    In addition, Rover why was the form "choosed" used instead of "chose"?

    Also please tell me what does "founder" mean in the passage?

    Would you also correct the passage I've done.

    Thanks

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