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    A long subject

    Sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about the new health care law is the profound relief it is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system. ---taken from the NYT

    Dear teacher,

    To understand the above correctly, I am recasting it as below. Could you please tell me whether my understanding is correct and whether the part in blue is an appositive of relief?

    The profound relief that it is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system is sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about the new health care law.

    Many thanks.


    LQZ

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    Re: A long subject

    Quote Originally Posted by LQZ View Post
    Sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about the new health care law is the profound relief it is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system. ---taken from the NYT

    Dear teacher,

    To understand the above correctly, I am recasting it as below. Could you please tell me whether my understanding is correct and whether the part in blue is an appositive of relief?

    The profound relief that it is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system is sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about the new health care law.

    Many thanks.


    LQZ
    Yes. It's confusing to write it with "it" (as above in green) because you haven't said what "it" is yet.

    The profound relief that the new health care law is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system is sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about it. This is better and grammatical, but the "it" at the end is still confusing. It might be best to change this to "... partisan clamor about the law"

    (I've never seen 'Darwinian' used that way before.)
    Last edited by Raymott; 24-Sep-2010 at 08:49.

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    Re: A long subject

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Yes. It's confusing to write it with "it" (as above in green) because you haven't said what "it" is yet.

    The profound relief that the new health care law is expected to bring to hundreds of thousands of Americans who have been stricken first by disease and then by a Darwinian insurance system is sometimes lost in the partisan clamor about it. This is better and grammatical, but the "it" at the end is still confusing. It might be best to change this to "... partisan clamor about the law"

    (I've never seen 'Darwinian' used that way before.)
    Thanks, Raymott. Your response makes it clearer to me.

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