[Cover Letter] Could you please proofread my cover lettre

[Fitades]

Hi,
I have some concern about wordings not being appropriate, too informal for a cover letter. I've underlined them.

Any hint will be welcomed!
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Dear Ms x,

Herein I express my interest in discussing a possible position in [agency name]. My web job hunting brought me to the 'asp.NET developer' web page of your agency. Working as a web developer at [agency name] sounds very appealing, and I am confident that my education and motivation will make me a candidate worth considering.

My unique mix of previous work and life experiences have convince me that software development is the career option that would bring me the most satisfaction. I am currently on a training course on .NET framework in Bruxelles.

With a degree in Electronics Engineering and a strong interest in technology, I have an sound technical background. I demonstrate a capacity to work both as an individual and a committed team member. As a result of my experience and education, I believe I am able to contribute the following qualities:
-A very good knowledge of web technologies (XHTML, CSS, Javascript, XML)
-A good knowledge of .NET technologies (C#, Winforms, ASP.NET, ADO.NET, T-SQL)
-Very good communication skills due to my various positions as an educator
-Competence in tackling problems and willingness to take responsibility
-Keen openness towards continuous learning of new technologies

I enclose my curriculum vitae for your kind consideration and look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
[my name]

P.S. : There is no inconvenience in making myself available before the end of the training course.

 

[albertino]

Hi,
I have some concern about wordings not being appropriate, too informal for a cover letter. I've underlined them.

Any hint will be welcomed!
---------------------
Dear Ms x,

Herein I express my interest in discussing a possible position in [agency name]. My web job hunting has brought me to the 'asp.NET developer' web page of your agency. Working as a web developer at [agency name] sounds very appealing, I am confident that my education and motivation will make me a candidate worth considering.

My unique mix of previous work and life experiences has convinced me that software development is the career option that would bring me the most satisfaction. I am currently on a training course on .NET framework in Bruxelles.

With a degree in Electronics Engineering and a strong interest in technology, I have a sound technical background. I demonstrate a capacity to work as both an individual and a committed team member. As a result of my experience and education, I believe I am able to contribute the following qualities:
-A very good knowledge of web technologies (XHTML, CSS, Javascript, XML)
-A good knowledge of .NET technologies (C#, Winforms, ASP.NET, ADO.NET, T-SQL)
-Very good communication skills because of my various positions as an educator
-Competence in tackling problems and willingness to take responsibility
-Keen openness towards continuous learning of new technologies

I enclose my curriculum vitae for your kind consideration and look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
[my name]

P.S. : There is no inconvenience in making myself available before the end of the training course.

(Not a teacher)
Wish you success. ;-)