[General] Looking for honest critique

[KMReifsnider]

Please read my story and let me what needs to be changed. I will also appreciate it if I could get a general impression of my writing in general. I am tryting to determine if I have any genuine talent for this and am having a lot of trouble getting any feedback. Thank you for your help

 

[KMReifsnider]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and give me your thoughts on my story. I will consider your suggestions. By the way, this is not a work of fiction, this really happened to me. I found it very cathartic to write it. I also have a work of fiction that I have posted in Ask A Teacher called A Lesson in Strength. I do use dialogue in this story. If you could read that and let me know what you think, I would appreciate it as well.