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    Are the following sentences acceptable?

    (1) On Amy's nine-year-old birthday, her parents gave her a secret present which was packed in a box.
    (2) Opening the box, Amy was pleasantly surprised to see a lovely puppy inside it which she had expected as a pet for a long time.

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    No. They are not acceptable.

    (1) On Amy's ninth birthday, her parents gave her a surprise present in a box.
    (2) Opening the box, Amy was thrilled to find a lovely puppy which she had been hoping for as a pet for a long time.

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    Quote Originally Posted by contiluo View Post
    Are the following sentences acceptable?

    (1) On Amy's nine-year-old ninth birthday, her parents gave her a secret present which was packed in a box.
    (2) Opening the box, Amy was pleasantly surprised to see a lovely puppy inside it which she had expected as a pet for a long time.
    A couple of suggestions. Otherwise, nice work.

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    A teacher argues two points as following.

    1. A puppy would thrill most children. Being "pleasantly surprised" is an odd response.
    2. Bigger problem: You can't be surprised by something you've expected for a long time.

    What are your viewpoints about it?

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    Re: writing

    Quote Originally Posted by contiluo View Post
    A teacher argues two points as following.

    1. A puppy would thrill most children. Being "pleasantly surprised" is an odd response.
    2. Bigger problem: You can't be surprised by something you've expected for a long time.

    What are your viewpoints about it?
    I can understand your teacher's point in #1, but the term "pleasantly surprised" in that context would be perfectly OK. I would argue your teacher's point in #2 because, while the child might have wanted/expected a puppy for a long time, she might not have expected it on her birthday.

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