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    Are the following sentences acceptable?

    (1) One day, while Amy was roaming the street, she saw a woman walking a dog which looked like her pet Lucky.
    (2) Amy chased them and caught up with them.
    (3) Amy stopped the woman and closely looked at the dog whose collar was tied with a rope by the woman.

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    Quote Originally Posted by contiluo View Post
    Are the following sentences acceptable?

    (1) One day, while Amy was roaming the street, she saw a woman walking a dog which looked like her pet Lucky.
    (2) Amy chased them and caught up with them.
    (3) Amy stopped the woman and closely looked at the dog whose collar was tied with a rope by the woman.
    #1 and #2 are fine.
    #3 sounds a little clumsy, even if you change by to to.
    I think you need to rewrite the whole thing; perhaps:
    Amy stopped the woman and looked closely at the dog, which was being led by a rope attached to its collar.

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    If I rewrite #3 as following, will it be better ?

    Amy stopped the woman and looked closely at the dog, which was being led by a leash attached to its collar.

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    Re: writing

    Quote Originally Posted by contiluo View Post
    If I rewrite #3 as following, will it be better ?

    Amy stopped the woman and looked closely at the dog, which was being led by a leash attached to its collar. (I've enlarged the font size to prevent eye strain.)
    It will be different - not necessarily better, as a rope and a leash are two different things.

    Please give your threads more meaningful titles than writing, not least to distinguish one from the other.

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