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Could you please check if it's grammatically correct and makes sense?
You are like a scorpion, my dear bro
Like a scorpion in a coward darkness
You are like a sparrow, my dear bro
Have the rush of sparrow
You are like mussel, my dear bro
Closed like a mussel, relax
And you are terrible
Like a dead vent, my dear bro
Not one, not five
There are hundred of millions of you
Unfortunately, you are like a sheep, my dear bro.
When sheepman raises his stick
You join the herd at once
And kind of haughty, you run to slaughterhouse
That is, you are the weirdest creature of the world
Actually weirder than the fish
Which is in the sea
But not aware of the sea
And the cruelty in this world
Thanks to you
And if we are starved, tired and in a welter of blood
And if we are still being squeezed to give our wine
I donít dare to say thatís your fault but,
Most of the fault is your, my dear bro.
Bro sounds strange to me in the context of a poem.
Last edited by Rover_KE; 08-Nov-2010 at 23:10.