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  1. Newbie
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    #1

    can u help me proofeading ?

    any one can help me ?

    "Soon our company will use the new office. The A/C dept will be on the 5th floor; the 6th floor will be used by the sales and marketing dept"

    any semantic problems?

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    Re: can u help me proofeading ?

    Hi, and welcome to the forums.

    Semantically: Does your reader know what the new office is? What will be on the 1-4th floors? Where will the other departments be?

    I assume you know about the mechanics of punctuation, capital letters, etc.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: can u help me proofeading ?

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Hi, and welcome to the forums.

    Semantically: Does your reader know what the new office is? What will be on the 1-4th floors? Where will the other departments be?

    I assume you know about the mechanics of punctuation, capital letters, etc.
    so, the correct anw should be...
    "Soon our company will have the new office. The Accounting department will be on the 4th floo; the 5th floor will be used by the Sales and Marketing department. Is it correct?

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    Re: can u help me proofeading ?

    Our company is moving into our new office soon. The A/C department will be on the 5th floor and Sales and Marketing will be on the the 6th floor.



    What is the A/C department? Where is the rest of the company? What is on the 1st through 4th floors
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #5

    Re: can u help me proofeading ?

    A/C = accounting

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