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Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being done by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.
 

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Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being done by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.

I don't understand the part in bold. Can you say that another way?
 

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I don't understand the part in bold. Can you say that another way?

Perhaps I should have written: "being waged by others?"
 

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Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being done by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.

Do you mean that other companies are waging a war against the company's competitors on its behalf?
 

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Do you mean that other companies are waging a war against the company's competitors on its behalf?

Other companies, government authorities etc.
 

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Do you mean that the subject company has competitors, but those competitors are having problems because of other entities?
 

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Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being done by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.

Could it be something on the lines of:

The company can derive some satisfactionfrom the fact that the struggle it is involved in against its competitors is being aided / has been joined by other companies and by government authorities.

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Okay. Let's forget about the company. I'll try to rephrase the sentence as follows:

Meanwhile, nation X can be satisfied with its war against its enemy being waged by others [International Tribunal, for example...] . And yet, escalation in the neighboring capital could affect nation X's northern border.
 

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No, it doesn't make sense.

If it's MY war, then others aren't waging it.
 

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Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being done by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.
"Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied that its competitors are fighting among themselves."
 

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No, it doesn't make sense.

If it's MY war, then others aren't waging it.

Barb D: You could turn directly to the writer and tell him you don't like his opinions… I've just translated his article…
 

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Then I don't know what you want from us. You asked us to check a sentence and I told you it was illogical. Is the grammar okay? Yes, it is. Does it make sense? No, it does not.
 

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Then I don't know what you want from us. You asked us to check a sentence and I told you it was illogical. Is the grammar okay? Yes, it is. Does it make sense? No, it does not.

Since I've registered here (and especially in 'Ask a Teacher' Forum) as a Hebrew speaker and a learner, I assumed it was understandable that I was, in the first place, interested in correcting my English mistakes. However, I apologize for not making myself clear. Nice talking with you!
 
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Do you mean that other companies are waging a war against the company's competitors on its behalf?
Does the sentence make sense if I phrase it like this:

Meanwhile, the company can be satisfied with its struggle against its competitors being waged on its behalf by others. And yet, a political escalation in the region could affect the company's sales.
 

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The problem remains the pronoun "its." You can say "the" struggle being waged on its behalf.
 
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