Hi, English is a second language for me too. But I can find minor mistakes here. hope it helps.
The connections I built shape my dreams which is are marketing, law and fashion and, color my world with numerous shades.
She is the who one who connected me with a new field of business;....
Also working at Baker&Mckenize effected affected me to want to work in aninternational firm more because it is not male domination dominated (?) comparing to Japanese firms.
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